All the information in the two paragraphs could be conveyed in a sentence.
Below are four possible versions of such a sentence.
In each the
emphasis is slightly different.
Although scientists, engineers and technologists can be expected to increase a manufacturing company's profits, this may occur at a diminishing rate because their cost reducing and/or quality improving activities will be subject to diminishing returns.
While their probable cost reducing and/or quality improving activities may be subject to diminishing returns, scientists, engineers and technologists can still be expected to increase a manufacturing company's profits, though at a diminishing rate.
Scientists, engineers and technologists can be expected to increase a manufacturing company's profits, but at a diminishing rate because their cost reducing and/or quality improving activities will be subject to diminishing returns.
Because their probable cost reducing and/or quality improving activities may be subject to diminishing returns, scientists, engineers and technologists can be expected to increase a manufacturing company's profits, but at a diminishing rate.
How does the emphasis change in each version?
Which sentences are favourable to SETS, which unfavourable, which neutral. Why?
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