The interplay between stereotypes and individuating information becomes clear during the earliest stage of the employee selection process, in which an applicant's paper credentials are reviewed, prior to any face-to-face evaluation.
The earliest stage of the employee selection process, in which an applicant's paper credentials are reviewed, prior to any face-to-face evaluation, clarifies the interplay between stereotypes and individuating information.
Either of these would be acceptable. I prefer the first because the preceding paragraphs must have discussed stereotypes and individuating information, and therefore the sentence moves the discourse on to an examination of the review of paper credentials.
Because the second sentence was formed by reversing the elements, it is in fact not an improved version of the final sentence from the original attempted paragraph, but rather a less clearly formed version of the original penultimate sentence:
Study of these contexts may allow a greater understanding of how these information sources interact.
Replace the pronouns here and you should have an excellent sentence. Construct it yourself, then click here.
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